12 July, 2011


I woke up in the dark, his stubble grazing the sensitive skin on my neck. It was six already. I turned around and looked at his face, one that I’d come to know so well in the last three weeks. He looked so sweet, so innocent. I had learnt that he was anything but; memories of last night came clouding into my mind as an involuntary blush colored my cheeks. I was suddenly glad that it was dark.

I got up carefully, so as to not wake him and pulled on his shirt. It still smells of him, I thought tugging the collar to my nose and inhaling deeply. We’d looked at each other a second time through the book shelves. I think I’d known from that moment that that we would end up where we were today.

As the enormity of the situation dawned on me, I lit a cigarette. A few puffs were usually enough to blank any emotion out. It didn’t seem to be working.

He’d wake up in a few hours, shower, shave and meet his brother at The Seasons for lunch. He was bringing his fiancĂ©, the girl who’d managed to get him down on a knee within a mere month of meeting. He’d heard a lot about her, mum was practically raving, and I knew that he was very much looking forward to meeting her.

How would he react when he finds out that the girl who walked out of his apartment at six today morning, the one who was threatening to break his state of carefree singledom, was his bhabhi, the love of his brother’s life?

I stubbed the butt out and turned to leave.

26 comments:

  1. Another fine piece of work :) Didnt expect the ending at all :P

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  2. really unexpected twist in the end. well-written.

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  3. Ouch! This was unexpected. Most of the people would believe it's work of a fiction but sometimes fictions are derived from reality. Wonderfully written Priyanka.

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  4. Hey P,

    Yummy :) I wish real life was that exciting.. oh wait, it has happened to a guy my friend knows.. his wife's sister turned out to be a fling he once had once upon a time... needless to say, the wife found out and they separated happily ever after :)

    To complicate things further, my friend is dating the sister now :D

    Life never is short of its suprises.

    Nice read, P. Very well written and the ending was the juice... very nice one :)

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  5. It's complicated - waiting to read Part II

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  6. Ouch! I'd like a part 2. The confrontation should be awesome!

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  7. shoot! when am i going to write such stuff...

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  8. Classy.. And no, don't write a second part. This is like a vignette. Let it be. The rest is for the readers to imagine.. :)

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  9. there is a part 2?! then hurry up with it, woman!

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  10. @ Varun, thank you milord <3

    @ Anurag, welcome.. glad you like it...

    @ Prateek, this particular one is, most assuredly, fiction :D But yeah, fiction is inspired by reality most of the time.. Thank you so much

    @ R-A-J, Haha... OMG seriously, whatte interesting life your friend has!:P And how's it going now with his ex-wife being his sis-in-law and all that...:D

    @ Purba, Anu, Indumathy, I hadn't intended on a second part. This is just a depiction of the ultimate everyday whore.

    @ HijiBijBij, aww.. you honor me:) Start now.. I'm sure you can come up with even better stuff..

    @ Spaceman Spiff, bingo.. vignette is exactly what I meant it to be.. A slice of life and that kinda thing:)

    @ Red Handed, heehee... painful, ain't it.
    @ Srinidhi, thanks:)

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  11. Awesome twist. Loved it.

    No part II please, you'll kill it.

    Cheers
    CRD

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  12. Short n Spicy. Brings evil smiles. ;D

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  13. Ohhh...such a cruel twist in the end. Very very spicy read!

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  14. What the...?? I was flabbergasted how the story culminated.

    Intersting.

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  15. I would leave both, A comment and chocolate that is, for such heart-skipping-a-beat post.
    It was seriously a big OUCH!

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  16. wow! that was fab! following your blog now!

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  17. @ CRD, thanks:) I know, right...some things left unsaid are more effective...

    @ Arun, welcome:D it does? You're thinking the worst about her, ain't you:D

    @ Cloud Nine, thank you!:D Spicy? My post? Oh, I'm honored...

    @ Blasphemous Aesthete, thank you Mr. Famous-Person-Who-Got-Interviewed:P Congrats on that...

    @ MSM, not ANYWHERE as good as you:)

    @ Ashwin, :P Was it?

    @ Risha, welcome! Ahaha, do please, I have run out of stock! And thanks:)

    @ Ram Pyaari, coming from a soon-to-be-published writer, praise indeed:)

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  18. wow! that was an awesome piece.
    Wish I could write something a s good as that.
    BTW wonderful blog, I can't help but FOLLOW!

    http://vj-menon.blogspot.com

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  19. @ Vijay, welcome:) And thank you so much for the compliment as well as the follow, keep visiting!

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  20. @ CRD, thanks:) I know, right...some things left unsaid are more effective...

    @ Arun, welcome:D it does? You're thinking the worst about her, ain't you:D

    @ Cloud Nine, thank you!:D Spicy? My post? Oh, I'm honored...

    @ Blasphemous Aesthete, thank you Mr. Famous-Person-Who-Got-Interviewed:P Congrats on that...

    @ MSM, not ANYWHERE as good as you:)

    @ Ashwin, :P Was it?

    @ Risha, welcome! Ahaha, do please, I have run out of stock! And thanks:)

    @ Ram Pyaari, coming from a soon-to-be-published writer, praise indeed:)

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  21. Ohhh...such a cruel twist in the end. Very very spicy read!

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  22. @ Varun, thank you milord <3

    @ Anurag, welcome.. glad you like it...

    @ Prateek, this particular one is, most assuredly, fiction :D But yeah, fiction is inspired by reality most of the time.. Thank you so much

    @ R-A-J, Haha... OMG seriously, whatte interesting life your friend has!:P And how's it going now with his ex-wife being his sis-in-law and all that...:D

    @ Purba, Anu, Indumathy, I hadn't intended on a second part. This is just a depiction of the ultimate everyday whore.

    @ HijiBijBij, aww.. you honor me:) Start now.. I'm sure you can come up with even better stuff..

    @ Spaceman Spiff, bingo.. vignette is exactly what I meant it to be.. A slice of life and that kinda thing:)

    @ Red Handed, heehee... painful, ain't it.
    @ Srinidhi, thanks:)

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  23. ooohhhhh..............spicy........................told u i wud b around!!!!!!!!!

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